Valentines day Story

Posted On February 13, 2012

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Once upon a time, there was a snowflake who was in love. Back in the raincloud, the first thing she saw was the sun, who was much too busy doing his sun-like duties to notice her small, fragile voice calling out to him. When she fell, she landed on her back on a garage in a big city. All day long, she would call out to the sun, but the cars would drown out her voice. One day, there was a big carnival on the other side of town, and the snowflake got her chance. She mustered all her strength, and shouted out “Mr. sun! I would like to tell you that I think you are beautiful!” the sun heard her and turned to her. “do you really mean that?” the sun asked. “yes, I do! I love you and want to spend my life with you!” she yelled back. The sun was happy that the snowflake had said this, so he leaned down and kissed her. The snowflake melted, but turned into a glistening star, and rose into the sky to sit with the sun, and they lived happily ever after.

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28 Responses to “Valentines day Story”

  1. Susanna Leonard Hill

    Oh, what a lovely ending! I was afraid she would melt! I love the idea of them living happily together in the sky 🙂 Thanks so much for entering!

    • Susanna Leonard Hill

      P.S. I was just reading about “the average human” since I haven’t seen your site before and saw you are 12 – are you one of Erik’s friends? I’m so glad to have another young writer involved in a contest!

      • Ben

        Thank you for the nice comment. I’m actually 14, my information is outdated and I heard about the contest from my mom. I don’t know Erik, but I really liked his porcupine story.

  2. Jennifer Young

    Aww, that was sweet. Thanks for sharing it 🙂

  3. Penny Klostermann

    Really great Valentines story! I loved the starry ending.

  4. thiskidreviewsbooks

    VERY nice!! I like the ending 🙂

    • sunriseovertheiceberg

      Thanks! I liked your entry as well!

  5. Cathy Ballou Mealey

    That was wonderful! I love the idea of an all-powerful sun bestowing a kiss that turns little snowflake into a star. Great work!

    • sunriseovertheiceberg

      Thank you. Im glad you enjoyed it!

  6. Renee LaTulippe

    Oh, so glad there was a happy ending! I had visions of Frosty the Snowman melting in the greenhouse and never coming back, haha! A lovely story, indeed (and so appropriate considering the name of your blog). 🙂

    • sunriseovertheiceberg

      Thank you! no, Frosty has always bothered me…too sad:)

  7. Sylvia Toyama

    Love that story, Ben. Very sweet ending.

    • sunriseovertheiceberg

      thanks. i prefer the sweet endings too 🙂

  8. Loni Edwards

    Great story Ben! I loved it! Good luck on the contest!

    • sunriseovertheiceberg

      thanks! I might try to get that one into cricket or cicada.

  9. Eric Van Raepenbusch - Happy Birthday Author

    Ben — Certainly two unlikely Valentine’s — but perfect on a day like we just in Ohio. Beautiful sunshine over a snow covered ground. The ending was fabulous! Very nice!

    • Ben

      Thanks! Its snowy here in Maine as well.

  10. delores

    So beautifl and what could have been a tragedy turned into a beautiful endng.

    • sunriseovertheiceberg

      Thanks!

  11. viviankirkfield

    So nice to meet you!
    What a lovely story…I could really see the sun giving the snowflake the kiss…beautiful vision…it made me smile. 🙂
    Thank you so much for sharing.

    • sunriseovertheiceberg

      Thank you! I’m glad the story made you smile!

  12. Stacy S. Jensen (@StacySJensen)

    Enjoyed this story. I think these unlikely Valentine’s were in my neighborhood on Sunday.

    • sunriseovertheiceberg

      lol They might have been!

  13. Heather

    I do love this one.

    • sunriseovertheiceberg

      Thank you!

  14. Margaret Greanias

    Beautiful story, Ben. I was afraid it would be sad, but what a wonderful ending.

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